Her name is Mary Green and she is a teacher of English. She is American.She is from New York.She has many students here in China. Now she lives in BeiJing.Her address is 205Guang`anmen Main Street. Her apartment number is 5-C. Her telephone number is 60214567.Her cellphone number is13701225763.Now look at her students`photos.
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but she is pretty healthy.She exercises every day,usually when she es home from school.Her eating habits are pretty good.She tries to eat a lot of vegetables.She eats fruit and drinks milk every day.She never drinks coffee.Of course,she loves junk food too,and she eats it o or three times a week .Oh, and she sleeps nine hours every night .So you see,she looks after her health.And her healthy lifestyle helps her get good grades.Good food and exercise help her to study better.。
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but she is pretty healthy.She exercises every day,usually when she es home from school.Her eating habits are pretty good.She tries to eat a lot of vegetables.She eats fruit and drinks milk every day.She never drinks coffee.Of course,she loves junk food too,and she eats it o or three times a week .Oh, and she sleeps nine hours every night .So you see,she looks after her health.And her healthy lifestyle helps her get good grades.Good food and exercise help her to study better。.。
My best friend is Jack,who is an American and likes playing basketball.He is at the age of 13.He dreams that he can bee a basketball player of NBA one day.He is very interested in collecting stamps.He starts collecting stamps since he was six years old and he got many favorite stamps when he was a high school student.Besides,Jack loves his mother so much that he gives *** al gifts to her when it's her birthday.
如果你是小学或者是中学生，建议你挑简单一点的格式写。太复杂的句型和语法不适合中小学生。
第一人称是我，第二人称是你，第三人称是她他它，如果以“I”开头贯穿的都是错的格式。
建议一下，一开始那85.8%没有提到，我觉得还是提一下的好。
在你文章开头加上一句：“About 85.8 percents（注意这得是复数）of Middle-school students express they don't want to change their handwriting even it is not good. And refer to the reasons, there are kinds of reasons。” 第二，是percent得加复数 percents。
第三，我觉得51.5 percents of students feel 这里，feel应该改成think会更好。 第四，注意人称代词的混乱。
还是51.5 percents of students这里，应该是第三人称，后面要用they而不是we。 第五，32.3 percents 那里，你的复合从句用的太复杂，导致无数不必要的倒装句，看起来不像是一句话，很别扭。
我改成：“32.3 percents of students think it is so busy that they hardly spend their spare time to practice handwriting.”具体的问题我一点点说。首先还是人称，we是不对的。
然后，think之后的第一个从句，没有主语，所以要加上it is。而且你用的是复合从句，第一个that可以省略就略去了，这样看起来更简洁。
还有，花费时间必须要用spend,do是错的。 第六，后一段的I concered，我想不通你想用的是啥词。
concered不是个词，而且近似的单词也没有符合你文章意思的…… 最后一点，最后一句我想你的意思应该是“我们应当建立一个规则去写出更好的字来”，可惜表达方式很成问题，这个句子从语法上是读不通的。我给你改成了“As far as our ancient social, handwritting has great effect on culture munciation. We should make an applicable rule for handwritting, to carry forward our traditional culture.” 其余的就没什么问题了，注意大小写，标点，能分段最好分三段，还有人称，复数。
恩，想给我分也可以，不过我不需要那玩意，所以你看着办。我是你哥，再有问题QQ我就行。
Her name is Mary Green and she is a teacher of English. She is American.She is from New York.She has many students here in China. Now she lives in BeiJing.Her address is 205Guang`anmen Main Street. Her apartment number is 5-C. Her telephone number is 60214567.Her cellphone number is13701225763.Now look at her students`photos. 希望采纳。
建议一下，一开始那85.8%没有提到，我觉得还是提一下的好。在你文章开头加上一句：“About 85.8 percents（注意这得是复数）of Middle-school students express they don't want to change their handwriting even it is not good. And refer to the reasons, there are kinds of reasons。” 第二，是percent得加复数 percents。 第三，我觉得51.5 percents of students feel 这里，feel应该改成think会更好。 第四，注意人称代词的混乱。还是51.5 percents of students这里，应该是第三人称，后面要用they而不是we。 第五，32.3 percents 那里，你的复合从句用的太复杂，导致无数不必要的倒装句，看起来不像是一句话，很别扭。我改成：“32.3 percents of students think it is so busy that they hardly spend their spare time to practice handwriting.”具体的问题我一点点说。首先还是人称，we是不对的。然后，think之后的第一个从句，没有主语，所以要加上it is。而且你用的是复合从句，第一个that可以省略就略去了，这样看起来更简洁。还有，花费时间必须要用spend,do是错的。 第六，后一段的I concered，我想不通你想用的是啥词。concered不是个词，而且近似的单词也没有符合你文章意思的…… 最后一点，最后一句我想你的意思应该是“我们应当建立一个规则去写出更好的字来”，可惜表达方式很成问题，这个句子从语法上是读不通的。我给你改成了“As far as our ancient social, handwritting has great effect on culture munciation. We should make an applicable rule for handwritting, to carry forward our traditional culture.” 其余的就没什么问题了，注意大小写，标点，能分段最好分三段，还有人称，复数。 恩，想给我分也可以，不过我不需要那玩意，所以你看着办。我是你哥，再有问题QQ我就行。