请大家帮忙修改一下这篇英语作文

Question

这是一篇四级考的作文，文章要求是写一篇竞选学生会主席的发言稿
Good morning teachers and students, it’s an honor for me to deliver my campaign speech here.
What comes first is that I have a good ability to be in charge of a union. Besides, I’m good at organizing, which I believe is essential for chairman of the student union. What’s more, I’m always full of energy. Thus, I hold the belief that I can add to an energetic atmosphere in the student union if I am elected.
When it comes to what I’ll do if I am elected, I have several plans. First of all, I’m going to hold several art festivals, during which every student can show his/her best art woks to all the students. In addition, I will modify several school rules in order to make then more suitable for our school. Last but not least, I will put a suggestion box in order to improve the work of the student union.
In a word, I believe I can be a good chairman of the student union, please vote for me. Thank you.
有劳大家指出其中的语法错误及不够地道的地方，谢谢了
（回答的好可以追加分数）

Answer 1

我把改过的文章写上了, 你自己看一下吧,我就不作解释了. 可能有的地方你认为可以不改, 你可以根据个人习惯做一些改动. 我把你的有问题的地方改正了,并且逻辑上有一定调整,还有用词. 当然,只是作为参考.

Good morning everyone. It's my great honor to give my campaign speech here.

First of all, I'd like to say not only am I strong in charge of a union, I am also good at organizing and this is an essential character for the chairman of the student union. Additionally, as an energetic person, I am totally convinced that I can create a live atmosphere in the student union if I will be elected.

Imagine that I were successful, I already have a list of plans. To begin with, I am going to hold several art festivals in which each student can show his or her best art creations to others. What follows is that I will modify several school rules in order to make them more applicapable to our school. Last but not least, I will set up a suggestion box so that it improves the work of the student union.

In summary, I trust I can be an eligible chairman of the student union, so please vote for me.

Thank you so much.

Answer 2

初中水平

Answer 3

1、in charge of a union,应为 the uninon
2、add to an energetic atmosphere 不妥，这气氛不是一个两个，不能用an，而且原来也不是完全没有气氛，全靠你一人来加。建议改为 contribute more to activate the energetic atmosphere ...
3、to all the students,其中 the 不需要
4、make then 应为 them
5、I will put a suggestion box ,其中 put 应改为 set

你的英语水平很不错！
建议：连词的应用应该更活一些，不要总套用这些词，虽然语法不错，但读起来比较生硬。可以多从报刊网络上读英语文章，看看人家怎么把上下文连接起来。
祝你进步！

Answer 4

Good morning teachers and students. It’s an honor for (for改为of，原因是这里的me同时是honor和不定式的的逻辑主语) me to deliver my campaign speech here.
What comes first is that I have a good ability to be in charge of a union. Besides, I’m good at organizing, which ，I believe ， is essential for chairman of the student union. What’s more, I’m always full of energy. Thus, I hold the belief that I can add to（add是及物动词 to多余） an energetic atmosphere in （in 改为 to，即：add sth. to把...加到...）the student union if I am elected.（是否改为if I succeed in the election campaign.）
When it comes to what I’ll do if I am elected, I have several plans. First of all, I’m going to hold several art festivals, during which every student can show his/her best art woks (works)to all the students. In addition, I will modify several school rules (better) in order to make then more suitable for our school.(The) Last but not (the) least, I will put (改为set up)a suggestion box in order to (urge forward to )improve the work of the student union.
In a word, I believe I can be a good chairman of the student union, please vote for me. Thank you.

Answer 5

honor 不可数 it's great honor

ability 不可数 I have strong ability

I can add an energetic atmosphere to the student union

最好不要用several plans 可以说 I have a clear and detailed plan

best art work

Answer 6

it’s an honor for me to deliver my campaign speech here.
I am honor to be here to deliver my campaign speech here.

What comes first is that I have a good ability to be in charge of a union.
First,I am quite confident that I am capable enough to manage the Student Union.

which I believe is essential for chairman of the student union.
which I believe is essential for a chairman of the student union.

I hold the belief that I can add to an energetic atmosphere in the student union if I am elected.
I hold the belief that I can active the atmosphere of the Student Union if I am elected.

When it comes to what I’ll do if I am elected,
As for what I'll do if I am elected.

I will put a suggestion box
I will set up a suggestions box
大概要改的就是这些吧