写一篇去深圳的英语作文

Question

如题所述

Answer 1

yesteday was Saturday. I and my father, mother, grandparents, brother went to Shenzhen by bus. In the morning we came down the mountain. I saw wooded mountains, wild flowers bloom. We climb up the hill along the mountain path. Come halfway up the mountain, I feel a little tired，it began to rain,My West Lake silk umbrella missed,. Dad said to me,“Jane， don’t do anything halfway.”at last，So I insisted reached the top, the top of the scenery so beautiful.We were flying kites, I was thirsty, my mother bought me a bottle of water, .finally we went home.finally，Since then, I've kept the umbrella。i was very happy

Answer 2

我个人认为，英语作文首先要注重条理，文章要做到条理清楚，让阅读者明白你的写作思路．如果你想到一句写一句，东拼西凑是得不到高分的，一般英语作文都是分三段，第一段提出问题，第二段分析问题．第三段提出个人的观点．在分析问题的时候，一般分析的是原因，每个原因你用相应的词组连接使得文章更有条理，例如，first
of
all，后面你写下第一个原因．besides
,后面你加上第二个原因，the
last
but
not
the
least,你加上第三个原因，这样每个原因的就让人一目了然，思路清晰．在第三段提出个人观点的时候也可以说，in
my
point
of
view,as
far
as
i'm
concerned,别总是说in
my
opinion，太千篇一律了．个人观点一般写两个就可以了，on
one
hand
后面你写一个观点．on
th
other
hand，,
你写一个观点．最后在写文章适当的用上一些精彩的词语和，词语的表达要富于变化，例如老父亲我们可以说old
father也可以说aged
father.再注意少写错别字，文章的得分就不会低．