急需帮忙给两篇简单英语作文改错

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Halloween, I would like to dress up as a black thing
the thing about wanted a black person, but his body is dressed in black.
Black T-shirt, black pants, black skirt, black hat.
He cast a face, other people can not see his face
in this way, and walk in the evening will not be seen.
This thing had eyes, but his eyes are red, the night will be light. Terrible
His hands holding a sword, can kill with the
He walked no sound. He will not laugh
this is my Halloween characters. He was very horrible

I liked him very much

My sister at home, suddenly, light dark. I do not know how the door, I was terrified.
I can not stand up. We sat on the sofa. We wait. I see nothing. Suddenly, I heard a strange voice. We are up and walked to the bedroom. I saw a white shadow. I was afraid, and the. We cried, shivering, pale. We are in the dark alone for a very old and I fear dark. Because I can not see. I am about to cry out. Subsequently, the light bright. The original is just a power outage. That white shadow, is my mother scared me.
The mother, Doh.
Next time, I am not afraid

这是中文
万圣节， 我要装扮成一个黑色的东西
这个黑色的东西大约就想一个人， 但他全身上下都穿黑衣服。
黑上衣， 黑裤子， 黑裙子， 黑帽子
这样子， 在晚上走路就不会被看到了。
这个东西有眼睛， 但他的眼睛是红的， 夜里会发光。 很可怕
他手里拿的一把剑， 可以杀人用
他走路没有声音。 他不会笑
这就是我鬼节的人物

我和姐姐在家里， 突然， 灯全黑了。 我门不知道怎么了， 我很害怕。
我不敢站起来。 我们坐在沙发上。 我们等待的。 我什么也看不见。 突然， 我听见了一个奇怪的声音。 我们起来，向卧室里走。 我看见一个白影。 我怕及了。 我们大叫， 发抖， 脸色发白。 我们在黑暗里单了很旧， 我最怕黑了。 因为我看不见。 我快要哭出来了。 随后， 灯亮了。 原来不过是停电了。 那个白影， 是我妈妈吓我呢。
这个妈妈， 真是的。
下次， 我不会害怕

很急

如果满意， 加20分

Answer 1

1. Halloween, I would like to dress up as a black thing
修改：On Hallowmas, I would like to be dressed up as a black figure.
(dress 是及物动词，I是被装扮的对象，所以要改为被动语态；“东西”指的是生命物的外形，而不是无生命的thing)。
2. the thing about wanted a black person, but his body is dressed in black.
修改：The figure probably looks like a person， but it wears in blak all over.(为了避免重复，此处的“穿”换成 wear)。
3. Black T-shirt, black pants, black skirt, black hat.
4. He cast a face, other people can not see his face in this way, and walk in the evening will not be seen.
修改：In this way, it keeps itself from being easily seen when it is walking at night.
5. This thing had eyes, but his eyes are red, the night will be light. Terrible
修改：It has eyes but they are red, shining terribly at night.
6. His hands holding a sword, can kill with the
修改：It carries a sward in a hand, which can be used to kill anybody.
7. He walked no sound.
修改：There is no sound can be heard when it is walking.
8. He will not laugh
修改：It is unable to smile.
9. this is my Halloween characters. He was very horrible
修改：And this is the character on my Halloween.
10. I liked him very much

My sister and I were at home, when suddenly the light gone out into darkness. I did not know what was happening and I got terrified.
I was too scared to stand up. We sat in the sofa while waiting. I could see nothing. All at once, I heard a strange voice. We were up and walked to the bedroom. I saw a white shadow. I was terribly afraid, We cried loudly, shivering and getting pale over the faces. We were in the dark alone for a long time. I was alone is my greatest fear with darkness, because I could not see anything. I was about to cry out. Subsequently, it lighted up. It turned out that the power had only been shut then and the white figure had been my mother who was threatening us.
What a dreadful thing Mother had done! Why she chould do so.
I will not be afraid next time.