这两句英语短句有语法错误嘛请问

I was born in ShangHai.Twenty-three years old this year.My job is accounting. i'm very happy to study English here with everybady.

没有错误,口语来说简单,易懂。
书面语的话,第二句最好改为I am twenty-three years old this year
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第1个回答  2012-07-02
自我介绍一般都这样:I am XXX, twenty-three years old, born in Shanghai. I am an accountant. I'm very happy to join you in English study here.
第2个回答  2012-07-02
@ Twenty-three years old this year没有主语,改成 I'm twenty-three years old this year
@ i'm very happy to study English here with everybady. 主语错了,语序不对,everybady. 这个单词打错了的吧应该,应改成 It's very happy for me to study English with everybody here . 这涉及到一个句型,就是 It's + 形容词+ (for sb.)+ to do sth . 你可以问老师 更确定一下,我是很确定的。(*^__^*)
谢谢,希望采纳。
第3个回答  2012-07-02
这个基本上是中式英语
i am twenty three years old from Shanghai and i am a accountant, i am very happy to study English with you guys
第4个回答  2012-07-02
男的可以说年龄,女的就别自曝年龄了吧。。。
第5个回答  2012-07-02
没有错误,就是不顺口,I was born in ShangHai. Now I am twenty-three years old .My job is accounting. i'm very happy I can study English here with everybody