麻烦你们帮我看一下这道英语 改错题； when traveling ,l take the following things ,which is my c...

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麻烦你们帮我看一下这道英语
改错题；
when traveling ,l take the following things ,which is my camera,a compass and some clothes .l think the ID card is used to taking pictures or record that we want .after we return home and take out pictures or recordings ,so they can bring us a lot funs .the compass is very essential of us to travel in the forests .without them ,we may get lost .and CD player is either very important for of to kill time when on the train or the plane .besides ,l had to bring one or two coats when traveling to different places

Answer 1

when traveling ,l take the following things ,which is my camera,a compass and some clothes .
我感觉这个句子存在以下问题，第一如果用定语从句，那么thing做先行词，引导词用that，但是that不引导非限定性定语从句，所以又只能用which，但是which没见过与thing连用的。另外后面的显然不止一样，谓语动词is是有问题的，建议将which is改成they are
l think the ID card is used to taking pictures or record that we want .
to take 不是taking ，what we want 不是that 问want。不过这个句子里面id card 用来拍照和记录？改了之后语法没问题，但是意思很别扭。
after we return home and take out pictures or recordings ,
介词后面用动名词，returning ，taking但是改完之后，非常难受，跟上文很不衔接，后面的so也跟这边结不起来，感觉很不舒服。
so they can bring us a lot funs .
a lot of funs

the compass is very essential of us to travel in the forests.without them ,we may get lost .
for us 对于我们
and CD player is either very important for of to kill time when on the train or the plane .
前面没有提及CD，是不是前面的ID写错了？either 改为another，另外一件，important 后面加thing或其他代词，for后面加us或者去掉for ，of去掉
besides ,l had to bring one or two coats when traveling to different places

had改为have，这篇文章，没有体现出过去时态

是不是自己写了一篇关于外出旅行的小短文，我感觉这篇文章很别扭，主要是不通顺，而不是多少语法问题，缺少必要的链接，而相关的链接词又不太恰当，读起来的时候，很难受。一点意见，供你参考

Answer 2

When traveling, I (1/take) the following things, which (2/is) my camera, a compass and some clothes. I think the ID card is used (3/to taking) pictures or record that we want. After we return home and take out pictures or recordings, (4/so) they can bring us a lot (5/-) funs. The compass is very essential (6/of) us to travel in the forests. Without them, we may get lost. And CD player is (7/either) very important for (8/of) to kill time when on the train or (9/the) plane. Besides, I (10/had) to bring one or two coats when traveling to different places

共有10处的错误（已用括号标出）。

　　1. take 前加will
　　2. which指代复数名词things，把is改为are
　　3. 或者把to改为for，即is used for taking；或者把taking 改为take，即is used to take
　　4. after 引导的是状语从句，删去so把后面的句子变成主句
　　5. 不能说a lot funs，改为a lot of funs
　　6. 把of 改为for，即The compass is very essential for us to travel
　　7. either用在否定句的句尾，此处是肯定句，改为also
　　8. 与第三处错误大体相同，把for 后的of 改为us
　　9. train 和 plane 是介词的并列宾语，只需要一个冠词，删去plane 前的the
　　10. 全文都是现在时态，此处也应该如此，把had 改为 have本回答被网友采纳

Answer 3

when traveling ,l take the following things ,which is（are） my camera,a compass and some clothes .l think the ID card is used to taking(take) pictures or record that(what) we want .after we return home and take out pictures or recordings ,so(把so去掉) they can bring us a lot funs .the compass is very essential of （for）us to travel in the forests .without them ,we may get lost .and CD player is either(also) very important for of(us) to kill time when on the train or the(the 去掉) plane .besides ,l had（have） to bring one or two coats when traveling to different places

Answer 4

可能错误有点多，不介意的话我直接按你的意思写一遍好了
while i am traveling,i will take the following things,my camera, a compass and some colthes.I think the camera is used to take pictures and record what we want.When we return home and take out the pictures and recordings,they bring us a lot fun.The compass is very essential for us when travel in the forests.Wihtout it we may get lost.And CD player is also very important for us to kill time on the train or plane.Besides,i have to bring one or two coats for traveling to different places.
希望可以帮到你、有不懂可以追问。谢谢。

Answer 5

is-are
taking-take
that-what
so去掉
a lot （of ）fun

funs-fun
of-for

them-it
the CD player
either-also
of？你打错了吧没打错就改us
had-have
不是十分确定，挺难的改错