我的作文第一段，请老师批改。（1）

Question

Cell Phone( 手机)
Base your composition on the outline given below in Chinese:
1. 手机已成为一种最普遍(popular)的通讯(communications)工具。
2. 随着科学技术（science and technology）的发展，手机的服务功能（function）更加多样化了。
3. 手机前途光明。

Cell Phone

In morden society,the cell phone plays a more and more important roles in people's daily life.The cell phone is become one of the most popular communications tools in the world.

Answer 1

Cell Phone

In morden society, the cell phone (is playing) a more and more important role in people's daily life. The cell phone has become one of the most popular communication/communicating tools in the world.

注：
1. 第一句时态从句意来看，用现在进行时最好；
2. role用单数形式，前面有a；
3. 第二句用现在完成时最佳；
4. communication是不可数名词，不能用复数形式，用communication/communicating tool都可以。

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Answer 2

In morden society,the cell phone plays a more and more important role in our daily life.The cell phone has become one of the most popular communications tools in the world.

Answer 3

Cell phones are playing a more and more important role in people's daily life in the modern society. Cell phones have become one of the most popular communicating tools in the world.

稍微修改了一些细节，包括定冠词、单复数、状语的位置以及形容词等方面。